the Rules: Avoid "Short Choppy Sentences"?
You may have been told by your teachers to
avoid "short and choppy sentences." In this quote, however, notice how
Ethel Wilson uses choppy sentences for effect. The sentences mimic two
women taking a quick look around a rail car after boarding a train. For
even more fun, find the story and read it!
"Even in the confusion of entering the
carriage at Salzburg, Mrs. Montrose and her cousin Mrs. Forrester
noticed the man with the blue tooth. He
occupied a corner beside the window. His wife sat next to him. Next to
her sat their daughter of perhaps seventeen. People poured into the
train. A look passed between Mrs. Montrose and Mrs. Forrester." —from
the story, "We Have to Sit Opposite" by Ethel Wilson.
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