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This week, Ada writes about the poem, "Freedom" by William Stafford. In her paragraph she compares her own definition with that of the poet. Note her use of parenthesis, a rhetorical question, and short quotes. All these increase the effect of her words.

 

"Writing on the Poem, 'Freedom'"

     We are told that everyone is born free. However, according to Mr. Stafford, nobody is really free completely, since “ No leader is free; no follower is free”. As for the rest (only loners, I assume), they can often be free (but not always). I'm afraid that I have to agree with that. Most people would say that we are free to do anything we want only under one condition; i.e. whatever we do, we should not jeopardize other people's freedom. Technically, I don't think we can regard ourselves to be free if we have to live according to the rules or restrictions set by the society, country, or culture. When one is completely alone, without anyone around, “you can usually be free some of the time” (again not always). Therefore, if we are neither leaders nor followers, we must be loners in order to enjoy the sweet taste of freedom. But I wonder how many of us can put up with the loneliness of being free? The only thing I know is that I would rather be captive than be lonely.

—Ada

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