Can a person be perfect? The answer is no. Everyone
has his own advantages and disadvantages. So, from my point of view,
there’s something that teachers can learn from students.
Asking a question to start with is a dangerous tactic
with your reader. Will your reader have the same answer as you? Maybe not!
In this specific case, there is not a lot gained from the question.
Don’t start too far from the topic. Make a general
statement, in this case, about teaching and learning and then get to your
“my point of view” is clear as you wrote it and
There is no doubt that the relationship between
teachers and students are [is] teaching and studying. However, in some
situation [s], teachers also can [also] learn a lot from students in some
aspects: general knowledge, fresh things [ideas], and attitude for
This introduction is definitely stronger as it starts
much closer to the actual topic. Remember that the reader has already read
your title, so is ready, generally, to read on your chosen topic. Use of a
contrast transition is a good way to bring the focus closer. In this case,
the writer has given the “list of three” approach.
Sometimes, people think the best things in life are
free. I have three reasons which make me to [omit-to] disagree with that
[this] statement. These three reason[s] are: [colons cannot follow “to
be”; instead, use a comma or nothing] [the] value of things, time, and
This introduction is very similar to the previous
one. It is clear enough, though the “reasons” are a bit difficult to guess
As I have explained [maybe ok; maybe not], I think that
free things in life are not the best. Therefore, people should pay for it
[things]. In order to be satisfy [satisfied] you have to spend time [,]
also. If your thinking is that free things are the best, allow me to say,
If you begin with the three part approach, probably
you should end with the same approach. This conclusion does have a very
nice final sentence, ending as it does on “No way!” And perhaps, the
writer should have used the quotation marks for emphasis.
Teaching is really hard work. It requires [a teacher] to
give out a lot of energy, as well is [being] very interesting and
creative. Thus, [a] teacher is getting stronger, more intelligent and
experienced all the time. [In any case,] if students return this energy
[back] over [with] their new knowledge and respective attitude, teachers
would feel a great satisfaction from their job well done.
The thesis is not in the first sentence; instead, it
occurs in the second and third. Avoid this! The final sentence is a good
“predictor” style sentence and a useful way to end many kinds of essays.
Being free in life is the best thing, indeed. We can not
only enjoy selecting work[s] we like the most, contributing to our
society, we also can enjoy free time exercising [our] bodies. Freedom will
be beneficial to everybody!
Exclamation marks are a bit tricky! Avoid them,
usually, and use them sparingly. Never use more than one.
We can engage in the work we like the most under the
status of freedom. [if we are free] (body 1)
Finally, teachers also can learn a lot from their
students’ attitude[s]. (body 3)
Standing at the edge of the knowledge ocean, what do you
want to do? (body 2)
Beautiful, but can you guess what topic this is?
Don’t go overboard.
In a similar way, teachers are exposed to new cultures.
Transition is clear from body 1 to 2 without using
In other words, they teach better because they learn how
to teach better from their students.
The use of “in other words” is a useful concluding
The love is an unfinished [unquenchable; infinite; or?]
resource of human warmth, and cannot be stolen, because it is a free
So, the teachers can learn to be devoted, to have a
strong will, and [how] to be reliable from their students.
In this case, “so” is used to mean “therefore” and so
does not indicate a failure to use it as a conjunction.