Writing an Essay (Anna)
an article, which expresses the writer's ideas on a chosen or
given topic. When we study English in a high school, we should learn
essay. In order to write a good
essay, it's important for students to know the structure of
essay writings, the problems we often meet when we write, and
how to improve our
The first important thing we need to know is the formal
essay. It includes
an introduction, two or three body paragraphs, and a
conclusion. So, usually we have four or five paragraphs in total.
essay contains about three to five hundred words. It is easy
for us to draw a diagram of
writing structure, but it is more difficult to write a good
The next important thing we should know is that we have two big
essay. One is language problems, which are made
by our shortage of vocabulary and the translation of our
thoughts from our first language to English. We often lose the
meaning in the translation between the languages. For example, we
could use our own language to express a very powerful meaning, but
when we translate it in English it's very weak. The other problem is
a cultural problem, since we come from a different country and are
not familiar with the culture, customs, environment and political
society here. Therefore, if the teacher gives us cultural topics, we
won't understand well. As a result we can't write well.
The most important thing is how to improve our
writing. We should try to think in English, read more novels
or short stories, and care about the environment and people that
surround us. We also should pay attention to news events every day
through watching TV, listening to radio, or reading newspapers.
Meanwhile, we should write a diary every day. When we have a good
general knowledge, we'll feel it is easier to write
essay on any general topic.
We now know the formal structure of
essay, and the two big problems in our
writing: language and culture. In order to improve our
writing, we should write according to the formal structure,
and keep reading and
writing every day. As a result, we'll resolve the
writing skill sooner. "Practice makes perfect."
According to Anna's arrangement, the body paragraphs are unbalanced.
essay, she thinks the most important thing is how to improve
writing. But what she actually emphasizes is two problems in
writing. I think the most important thing in
writing is how to overcome the problems in
writing: shortage in vocabulary and culture difference. If
you have rich vocabulary to express yourself and deep understanding
to activities around you, I'm sure you have got the foundation to
build a beautiful
essay. Reading and
writing are only methods to grasp vocabulary to know the
culture. Structure is standard, it's easy to follow. If I were
Anna, I would say, "The most important thing we should know.
. .. .",and in the next paragraph, I would begin with, " The next
step is to improve our
writing. . . ."
Olga's Comment: In my
essay is considerably substantial, clear and interesting. I
completely agree with her point of view. The second body paragraph
is a little longer because she inserted two ideas in it, but I don't
think that something is wrong with that. I read it three times and
didn't get tired.
Jin's Comment: The
body paragraphs are unequal. The second one is definitely longer,
and it drags the readers to pay more attention to it, but they are
all important. Maybe Anna's point is just focusing on the problems.