ADULT LEARNING CENTRE
January 21 and 22, 2004
Today, we will read other student’s writing in order to learn more
Trade paragraphs with your partner (the final, revised draft).
Read the other student’s writing once without stopping.
Read the paragraph again and mark one sentence you think could be
improved. Write a one sentence suggestion which states what could be
done to improve it (make it shorter, longer, add details, and so on).
Each student takes a turn to identify and explain his or her
suggestion to the other person.
What kinds of revisions were suggested by class members? Can these
revisions be classified into any groups? How were the suggested
revisions different from or the same as the ones you made yourself?
• Find one expert opinion on revision (revising) and bring it to
class next week. (Use Google to search for “writing revision” or
Examples of student revision; two
teacher paragraphs revised for length.
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