First of all I have to cook rice and put eggs in a pan. Also I have to choppin the vegetables all I like and then mix with eggs in a pan until vegetable soft. Finally put rice, sugar and a little bit of salt and mix until tasty and serve.

Title is NOT a sentence. Centre your title on top. Make it clear and specific like this one. The first sentence here is a detail sentence. Add a topic sentence first: “Preparing fried rice is easy.” If the paragraph is PROCESS (recipe) then all steps must be clear and in order. For example, “Cook the rice first. Then, heat the pan. Put in some eggs. Chop vegetables I like and mix with the eggs until the vegetables are soft (or “soften”)


     I like cooking stir-fries. I cook it in a frying pan in oil and it sizzles when the oil is hot. When you add the vegetables, it smells very sweet because I put teriyaki sauce on it. It’s medium cooked. It looks very yummy and you touch the vegetable when cutting and it tastes phenomenal.

Lots of good ingredients in the above paragraph. Make sure to check that your sentences don’t run on (using “and” to join instead of stopping) Notice the short sentence, “It’s medium cooked.” Short sentences are useful to make the reader wake up!


Teacher Example


     I love to make breakfast on a weekend morning. First, I put bacon into a cold frying pan and turn up the heat. The bacon sizzles nicely and fills the room with its salty smell. At the same time, I make the coffee in my cappuccino maker. After the coffee is pumped, I steam the milk in two large cups, one for me and one for my wife. To know when the milk is ready, I put my hand on the side of the cup to feel the heat. Now, the bacon is nearly cooked, so I put two bagels into the toaster oven. The door shuts with a bang! Then, the eggs go into the hot bacon fat. I like my eggs sunny side up. Last, I pour glasses of orange juice and call my wife to the table. We like to eat our bagels with sweet strawberry jam on top of cream cheese. Weekend breakfasts are the best ones of the week! (164 words; first draft)