The following notes come from a student
practice session on writing improvement. Includes samples of student
writing and teacher comments (in italics).
Making Sentences Longer: Appositives
Examples of the Appositive in Bold Text
Balvinder likes water, fresh and cold, from the tap in the kitchen.
Everyone else likes tea, except Balvinder, poor man.
I, the crazy teacher, like tea, Chinese green from the Superstore close to my house in Burnaby.
information after the object noun is one good way to increase
information and detail (specifics) into a sentence. You can also
increase the information about the subject (enclosed in commas)
five sentences using five different nouns and verbs. Make each
appositive (the adjective phrase added after your object at least five
words) The sentence will be about 10 words total.
Student Examples of Increasing Sentence Length
(adding information after the object noun—adjective phrase)
I am fond of music, all kinds, especially Classical.
took out two repeated “music” and made the sentence more concise. Use
the fewest words to say the most meaning (kind of like poetry).
I have a scarf, long and white with bunches on the end, knitted by me a long time ago.
The student has the idea. Adding much information and detail after the noun “scarf.”
My dog, a Shiba Inu, was bought in Japan, a place where the price of these dogs is cheaper than here.
The student demonstrates both the appositive after the subject “dog” and the object “Japan.”
Teacher SampleJohn loved the mountains, the high ones on Vancouver Island near his place on the river.
Fred hates it when he buys stale crackers, packaged two months before with a tiny, hard-to-see date.
He prefers to watch movies on DVD, the new media storage containing many special features.
Today, we read a poem by Wislawa Szymborska, the shy winner of the 1996 Nobel Prize for Literature.
Today, I had lunch, leftover Thai food in an easy-to-reheat glass container.
Idiomatic Verb and Preposition Combinations
The Best Gifts
Our Earliest Memories
What We're Reading Now
Simple Sentences (Noun and Verb)
Writing about a Favourite Place
Making Sentences Longer 2
Writing about the Rain
Writing about a Person
Writing about Lunch
Writing about Snow
Making Sentences Longer