The following notes come from a student
practice session on writing improvement. Includes samples of student
writing and teacher comments (in italics).
King argues that "simple sentences provide a path you can follow when
you fear getting lost." Use his exercise of writing simple sentences: a
noun plus a verb. Perhaps you can write an entire assignment in this
way, first, and then fill in the details later!
Immigrants give up.
Teacher Longer Sentences (from the two word sentences)
Life becomes difficult when we look at everything we see and see difficulty.
A dog barks at midnight beside an old tree in the back of the garden.
A wife abandons hope when her husband leaves.
Student Longer Sentences
The airplane landed in the morning and a new life starts.
neighbour was removed because she refused to pay her house rent. Her
neighbour said she always liked to delay her monthly rent and could not
cope with this situation, so, finally, she was removed.
He saw the trees budding, flowers blooming and baby animals running all over.
Sun rises, flowers bloom and spring comes to our city.
The volcano, which had slept for almost one hundred years, finally erupted yesterday, and about 10 000 residents were evacuated.
The wife abandons her husband because he is not good enough for her.