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The following notes come from a student practice session on writing improvement. Includes samples of student writing and teacher comments (in italics).

Writing about Rain


Rain Vocabulary
umbrella, road closed due to flooding, flood, mudslide, a shower (is a short period of rain; it stops sometimes), heavy rain, pouring with rain, stormy,

boots, waterproof hat, boots, coat

gumboots, raincoats, Gore-Tex, mackinaw, sou’wester

soaked through, soaked to the skin, drenched, it’s wet, moist, damp

leaks and leaking roofs, hair sticks to your forehead

raining cats and dogs (either a cliché or not used much)

it’s pissing (Canadian slang)

it’s really coming down! it’s Biblical

puddles, small lakes in Surrey, a rooster tail (behind a car)

Narrative Structure (write as a story)


The time (setting); Time: last week, yesterday, today Place: where is it? On Kingsway, in front of my house, in my bedroom,

Who (the characters) the people in the story. Use 2 today.

What: The plot. Something will happen.

Dialogue: People talking in your story.

My mom said, “Why are you so wet!” I answered, “Because it is raining, silly!”

The result: My mother ran a hot bath for me so I could warm up. And, after I got out, she gave me a hot bowl of barley soup.

Student Rainy Days

Student One

It rains heavily in summer in my hometown. When I was 13 years old, I lived with my grandfather. He took care all of my living, including cooking, washing clothes, and cleaning my room.

This is setting above. It gives the time and situation clearly. Say as much as you can with as few words as possible.

I always forgot to bring an umbrella with me. One day in the afternoon when I was having a class in school, the sky turned dark and the rain was pouring loudly.

Suddenly, I saw the face of my grandfather; he looked wet and was searching for me. I came out to him. He said, “You forgot to bring the umbrella so I brought it to you. I need to go home now and prepare you dinner.”

Character is told by actions, usually, more strongly than any other way. This example fully shows us the character of the child and the grandfather through actions.

The story is a “memoir” where an adult looks back at the child to see it with new eyes.

Student Two

I hate rainy days. Because of the rain, I can’t enjoy the sunshine. I am usually more cheerful on sunny days than on rainy days. Yesterday when I went home after class, I said to my husband, “I’m so tired now.”

My husband asked me, “Why?”

I told him, “I feel uncomfortable in the rainy days.” So yesterday, I went to sleep at 11 p.m.

Student Three

Suddenly, it started a stormy rain. I was very wet. It was cold and windy. I was shaking and the leaves where I was were muddy and slippery.  I was alone. The sun was setting. I was stuck there.

Each short sentence makes a clear statement to us. The details given in such a way are more emphatic. The feelings of the writer are made clear to us. The short sentences sound anxious and upset. This is true.

 



Teacher Sample

Trying to Walk My Dog
(a true story by Brad)

Yesterday, my poor dog did not have a walk. I wanted to give her one, but with all the rain it just didn’t happen. In the morning, as you may remember, it was pouring, just pouring!

My daughter had a dentist’s appointment in the morning on Broadway near Cambie in Vancouver. As I drove over to get her, the rain had almost stopped. Even though it wasn’t raining much, big puddles filled the road and the cars splashed through them noisily. The rain had turned to drizzle by then. Too bad, my dog was at home sleeping in the basement.

All the time I waited for her and while we had lunch, too, the rain was almost stopped. She had bad news. She told me, unhappily, “I have to start wearing my retainer again all the time!”

I said, “I’m sorry to hear that but it is best for you if you want to keep straight teeth.”

What’s more, she added, “I have to pick up my retainer at 4 o’clock. Can you give me a ride?”

After I returned home, the rain had started again. The sky was so dark that my Christmas lights came on on the photocell. I looked out. Impossible, I thought, to walk a dog in this weather.

When it was time to go out to Broadway, the rain had stopped again. My dog slept in the basement. After dinner, we opened the door to our back porch. The rain drummed down on the plastic cover. My dog went outside for five minutes and returned, soaked.

Lucky for me, I have a very philosophical dog! She slept happily all day (and night) and went for a walk with me this morning. What a relief!




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