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English 10
Guided Revision of a Short Story
March 9, 2005

Today, we will revise the stories we wrote for homework. For each step, the teacher will guide you. Listen carefully to each instruction, write as requested, and be prepared to share your results with the class. If you have not done the homework, write sentences according to the instructions below.

Guided Revision:

1. Read your first five sentences. Do you give the setting? If yes, add one or two new sentences describing the setting. If no, add four sentences of setting to your story.

2. Read the sentences where the main character is introduced. Are the sentences clear? Make one simple sentence into a compound or complex (if you have strong sentences already, add a simple sentence instead). If you have forgotten to introduce the main character, introduce him or her now.

3. Read the sentences about the other characters in your story. For each character, add one sentence of dialogue OR revise your dialogue to make it clearer.

4. Check your paragraphing. Have you started a new paragraph when a character speaks for the first time? Find and mark all the paragraphs. Is it clear, always, who is speaking?

5. Find places where we have information on the child's point of view. Have you shown a child's point of view clearly? If not, write one sentence that shows the thinking of the child in your story. If yes, improve or revise one (or more) sentences written to show this point of view.


Finish all revisions done in class. Hand in a clean copy on March 16.

NOTE: The Unit Two: Sentences Review Test from Level H Vocabulary will be given at the March 23 class.

Notes from the Class:

Student Titles:

A False Alarm

This title could mean many things, so we are interested immediately in what is the "false alarm."

The title comes after the story, usually. If you write a clear story, the title will come to you. Often, movies have a different title when in production.

The child learns: about responsibility for her little brother by making some kind some of mistake.

Giant Plunge

Child learns: she learns to overcome her fear. She's afraid of the water but in front of other smaller and younger children she is able to go in.

Love Your Neighbour

It's an ironic story.

Child learns: Not to trust strangers.

Steven's Seventh Cake

We can guess that a child might eat too much in this story. It might be funny. That is an attractive thought.


Child learns: something about curiosity.

Ice Cream

Child: The child learns to listen and obey her mom.

In stories you need something to get the story started and help the reader to get curious.


Tense of Stories

When you write a story, tell it in the past tense. Dialogue may be in the present, of course.

The First Sentence

It was a sunny but cool and comfortable Sunday, a good day for outdoor activities.

The sentence shows the setting very clearly (Sunday, the weather etc.).

Lisa didn't like Mom's idea at all.

In this sentence, we have a question already. Why not? The setting is not too clear after this sentence, so could be added.

It was a snowy chilly Saturday.

The setting has a big effect on what happens. The snow keeps the family home for the day.

It was a sunny Saturday morning.



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