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  Brad's Teacher Writing (March 17, 2001)
 

 
 

The following example uses an exercise taken from Anne Lamott's book, "Bird by Bird." It was written during a class exercise in Advanced Composition. The original paragraph of 269 words (written in April, 2001) was revised and re-titled on March 17, 2004 by Brad Hyde.

 

The Stride Avenue School Lunchroom, 1964

     My most vivid lunchtime memories concern Stride Avenue Elementary in Burnaby. I love to eat, so I ate quickly and efficiently; besides, the playground was better than lunch! My mother packed me peanut butter and jam sandwiches on white bread, wrapped in waxed paper and carried in a hinged metal lunchbox. Unfortunately, she also packed an apple and milk. Some kids got wagon wheel biscuits and a glass bottle of Coke. How we all envied them! Some tossed most of their lunches out, while others were talking so loudly that they almost forgot to eat. One special day, someone played The Beach Boys on a scratchy monaural record player, planting the seed of my lifelong love of music. Indeed, the lunchroom remains a fond memory to this day. (128 words; second draft by Brad Hyde on March 17, 2004)

 

 

 

 

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