paragraph below was written
to show the opposite position to a persuasive
paragraph on fast food. The original paragraph, outlining the
dangers of fast food, follows the new paragraph, outlining the
Fast Food? Enjoy Your Dinner!
Fast food gets bad press these days,
especially since it often contains too much fat, sodium and
calories, but it brings much needed convenience to our stressful
busy world. Fast food is easily found and varied. At any mall,
for example, customers have many choices at the food court. To
avoid too much fat or salt, they can choose healthier options:
salads, turkey sandwiches and so on. On a busy Saturday, with
two hungry kids, a mother out shopping is happy to find exactly
the right food to eat. Not only that, but the food will be ready
quickly, thus reducing the stress on her from demanding
children. Fast food is also inexpensive; most menu items offer a
full meal for under ten dollars. It is easy to see why fast food
is so popular these days—it is convenient and reduces our
stress. (144 words; first draft writing by Brad Hyde on April 6,
Fast Food? Be Careful What You Eat!
is convenient when in a rush, but it is a bad idea to eat it too
much or too often. Recently, McDonald’s featured a two dollar
deal: Big Mac and small fries. Very tempting, and my son (who
doesn’t normally eat at McDonald’s) bought this meal last week.
What is the nutritional content of a Big Mac and fries? The
hamburger contains 570 calories; almost half (280 calories) come
from fat. Ten grams is saturated, the most dangerous and harmful
to our heart. The Canadian Food Guide recommends that we "choose
lower-fat foods more often." My son also ate a small fries!
Unfortunately, they contain 210 calories, with 10 more grams of
fat (1.5 grams saturated). He bought a drink as well, which adds
another 150 calories (small size). Imagine he eats this dinner
more than once a week! A two dollar meal contains a lot of fat.
So, although fast food is very convenient (and cheap) to buy, it
includes lots of fat—I think I’ll go and eat an apple, instead!
(Written as an example of persuasive writing, using facts to
support opinions; 172 words—revised in 2005)