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fThe following paragraph was written for a class exercise in Advanced Composition titled Writing Good Persuasive Paragraphs
 


Fast Food: Be Careful What You Eat!



     

     Although many of us find fast food convenient when in a rush, it is a bad idea to eat it too much or too often. Recently, McDonald’s in Canada had a two dollar deal: a Big Mac and small fries. This is a very big temptation, and even my son (who doesn’t normally eat at McDonald’s) bought this meal last week. But what did he eat when he ate a Big Mac and fries? For the hamburger, 570 calories, with almost half (280 calories) coming from fat. Ten grams is saturated, the most dangerous kind, the kind most harmful to our heart. The Canadian Food Guide recommends that we "choose lower-fat foods more often." Now, remember that my son also gets a small fries! Unfortunately, there are another 210 calories in the fries, with 10 more grams of fat (1.5 grams of it saturated). I’m sure he bought a drink as well, which adds another 150 calories (small size). Now, imagine he eats this dinner more than once a week! A two dollar meal contains a lot of fat. Although it is very convenient (and cheap) to buy fast food, it is quite alarming to see just how much fat we are eating—I think I’ll go and eat an apple instead! (212 words; written as an example of persuasive writing, using facts to support opinions in 2004; revised in 2013; note that my son has been a vegetarian for eight years and I, too, often eat meals without meat nowadays.)

Sources for the Paragraph

Fast Food Facts

Canadian Food Guide (Information on fat in diet)

Fast Food Nation: The Dark Side of the All-American Meal (book on the fast food industry)

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